Skip to content

Between a rock-paper-scissors and a hard place

June 11, 2009

It wasn’t that long ago that I wrote a story based on the timeless game of Rock-Paper-Scissors.  It was a cute little story, a commentary on organized religion.  It never became what I wanted it to be, so I shelved it.  (I do that a lot.)

Anyway, while watching a rerun of The Mentalist, Simon Baker’s display of R-P-S inspired me to pull the story back out.  It was an entertaining read but it still had that lacking.  What’s more, I’m not sure where the problem lies.  I suspect it’s too long for what it is (2400 words), but I see few places to cut.

That’s not true.  I know where the cuts would come.  But like Dan Brown, I don’t want to cut all my research out of my story just because it could survive without it.  I think the researched part (the possible origins of R-P-S) strengthen the story and make the two main characters sound intelligent and knowledgeable.  But, also like Dan Brown, maybe I should let the cuts strengthen the story.

I have decided to post it to OWW (once “Poison Inside the Walls” gets a couple reviews…it has one!) to see how others react to it.  While they peck at it, I’ll try to shave it down on my own to see if (a) my revision fixes their complaints, and (b) my revision maintains whatever strengths they perceive.    I should be able to whittle it down to 1500 words if I cut some content.  It’s an experiment I’ll conduct while I’m in Gatlinburg next week.  (Unless, of course, something else demands my attention.  Smoky Mountains have that effect on me sometimes.)

-Oso

Advertisements
2 Comments leave one →
  1. June 12, 2009 12:52 pm

    Good luck with the story!

    I’m just a random lurker. I hope you don’t mind. It felt rude not to let you know someone was in the room, here. 🙂 I spotted your blog while I was looking up some WotF stuff. (I’m on LJ; there are a lot of us spec fic types over there.)

    • osomuerte permalink
      June 12, 2009 3:57 pm

      Thanks for saying hi. Glad to have newcomers. Wish I’d cleaned up the place first. Feel free to look around and drop in anytime.

      I’ll watch for your name to come up on the WotF blog. And I’ll drop by your blog when I get the time.

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: